Qualities of expression: Ease affected by harsh expressions

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Inharmonious expressions resulting in unpleasant sounds may set a reader's teeth on edge.
(Source: Captain Science, Issue 7)
 From Beginnings of Rhetoric and Composition, by Adams Hill:

EASE AS AFFECTED BY WORD CHOICE

Harsh Expressions

Unless a writer wishes to shock, or at least to surprise, his readers, he should as a rule avoid expressions that are disagreeable in sound.
A: He is rather corpulent. 
B: He suffers from a tendency to corpulency.
In Sentence B, the repetition of "-ency" grates on the ear.
A: The streets are paved are very irregularly paved.
B: The streets are extraordinarily irregularly paved.
A: Usually, but not always, fine minds are fitly clothed.
B: Certainly fine minds are usually fitly clothed though not always.
A: Usually I think about this matter without the least success.
B: I think about this matter usually entirely unsuccessfully.
A writer should be careful not to put two or more adverbs in "-ly " close together.
A: Ghostly regulars seemed to hurry staggering past.
B: Ghostly regulars seemed hurrying staggering past.
A: Nothing would surprise me more than to hear that they are going to be married.
B: Nothing would surprise me more than to hear of their being going to be married.
In the B sentences, the repetition of "ing" is inharmonious.
A: Nature has forceps far more terrible.
B: Nature has far terribler forceps.
A: I think him the most remarkable pontiff that has darkened God's daylight.
B: I reckon him the remarkablest Pontiff that has darkened God's daylight.
A: She is the most foolish, most unmusical fowl that flies.
B: She is the foolishest, unmusicalest of fowls that fly.
The harsh B sentences come from Carlyle. Those who fall short of Carlyle in originality and in vigor will do well to avoid his harshness.*
A: The significance of this will be better understood when it is known that I met the good doctor at his hotel.
B: The significance of this will be the better understood when it is learned that the writer hereof met the good doctor at his hotel.
A: Several of the poems in the volume were the joint work of the authors.
B: Several of the poems therein contained were the joint work of the authors.
"Hereof" and "therein" belong to a class of words that are usual in legal documents or in other kinds of formal writing, but that give an unpleasant stiffness to ordinary prose.
*A reminder that good writing is more dependent on style than rules.

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